Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Many people suppose that after finishing high
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, they will continue to study in university or college which will help them
gain
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much more success. Other people think that it is better to seek a job after they leave
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highschool
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essay will illustrate obviously both views given above and give the recommendation which aspect is more beneficial from my perspective. On the one hand, immediately finding a job after high
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not only helps people understand the value of money quickly, but
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they can
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an abundance of intriguing experiences. It is obvious that when students who have less social skills can have a chance to respond in work environments, it is absolutely beneficial for improving crucial skills
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as : the appropriate attitude when working in a strange environment or conversation skill.
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, in Vietnam, especially in some small countries where the percentage of low standard families, they tend to lead their children after high
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, finding
jobs
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to support their financial situation.
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,
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is the best location that gives the most interesting experiences for students, so they extremely have a chance to receive different
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which have
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salary than others. When studying in university, teachers just focus on specialist areas,
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they sharply develop what they expert.
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, because students can approach higher
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knowledge
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compared to high
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, which is attributed to the fact that they will have possibilities to
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long-term
jobs
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, Vietnam Airlines, which is one of the most developed airlines in Vietnam, they have
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tradition that for seeking pilots, they just agree with experienced captains or co-pilots, or high-qualified student pilots. In conclusion,
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getting
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a soon job
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jobs
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after high
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will have some positive aspects, if they touch in
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standard of knowledge, absorb more helpful knowledge, it will be better for them to
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huge achievement in future
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Academic qualifications
  • Specialized skills
  • In-depth knowledge
  • Personal growth
  • Social development
  • Practical experience
  • Financial independence
  • Career progression
  • Professional networking
  • Education
  • Work experience
  • Successful career
  • Personal interests
  • Career goals
  • Decision-making process
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