Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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getting paid, and it is still increasing year
by year
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, and in India, the army troops, doctors, nurses, engineers etc. earning 30 thousand USD per year
. So, it is unfair for a person
who devoted his full life toward achieving this
profession
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profession
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plays it does not play for her sake, they play to represent their nation. They are getting paid because they are representing their countries and if they win the Fame of the country also
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In conclusion, I agree that people who think playing sports is not worth as per they present but for representing the whole country will make it worth it.Submitted by ieltsmaterialof on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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