Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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amount of money with their
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, sports is one of the
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. Every coin has two faces. It totally depends on demand. I totally agree that
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other
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. There are few
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sport
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person
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millions of dollars in 90 minutes of
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the army
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serving society and community will never earn more than thousands of dollars. The
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sport
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person
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does
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hard work as highly risky
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but
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sport
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person
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getting paid, and it is still increasing
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by
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. If I brief it with an example Messi yearly salary is 35 million dollars for a
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, and in India, the army troops, doctors, nurses, engineers etc. earning 30 thousand USD per
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. So, it is unfair for a
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who devoted his full life toward achieving
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profession
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. If someone who pursued
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profession
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and not getting income as much as motivative
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how people can be able to convince themselves to pursue these
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hand, the competition to achieve success in
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sport’s
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industry is hard for those people
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did
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surpass their limits. When
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a sport
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sport
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person
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plays it does not play for her sake, they play to represent their nation. They are getting paid because they are representing their countries and if they win the Fame of the country
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rose.
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sport
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person
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people
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getting higher
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then
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another profession
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. In conclusion, I agree that people who think playing sports is not worth as per they present but for representing the whole country will make it worth it.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial remuneration
  • exceptional
  • merit
  • talent
  • demand
  • entertainment value
  • career span
  • physical demands
  • justified
  • unfair
  • criticism
  • income inequality
  • societal priorities
  • sportsmanship
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