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The environmental problems that today's world is facing are so great that there is little ordinary people can do to improve the situation. So government and large organizations should be responsible for reducing the amount of damage being done to the environment. The what extent so you agreed or disagree?

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Issues regarding nature and our surroundings are getting more and more challenging to cope with as
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 part of the population is not able to change the situation. I totally agree that the authorities and companies should
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control
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 and other illicit cases related to contamination. I reckon that
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distinctly
 of the power that grounding companies
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 leaves no option to people. One of the reasons why it
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 to be strictly controlled is because the majority notices only those problems which directly concern their lives and
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 way of dealing with the issues does not give
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proper results.
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, problematic
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 can involve its inhabitants to protest and stand up for
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environment
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 after
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 often disappears. The thing is that peoples' intentions tend to take them only so far which
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 does not prevent other issues worldwide. Despite that, considerable amounts of people protesting and
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 typically depends on big specialised organizations or
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 actors who have sufficient connections and resources. It ought to be mentioned that lots of profound disasters were prevented with the help of figures we often see on the blue screen.
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, most of funds and demonstration organised by regular people
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 effect on the actual circumstances as these tend to be left overlooked. In summary,
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 strongly believe that
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 necessary to involve government and industries to watch
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 system and especially its
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