it is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents for instance for sports or music and others not.Discuss both view and your opinion

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There’s a school of thought that, humans are born with the extraordinary
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to become musicians or sportspersons in future.
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, some say that with good coaching and encourage any human being can be made into a sports hero or a musician.
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, my essay expresses these both views and
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my opinions below.
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, the babies born to the world carrying the DNA mainly from their
parents
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and some with their ancestors.
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, it is vital to note that, these unborn children were absorbed most of the talents and
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of their
parents
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and express them when they were younger with the
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of singing or playing instruments and
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winning as athletes. As
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in
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martial
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the daughter
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of Mozzzart get his
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experience
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music from his
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can be
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significants
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.
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,
this
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expresses that, people can rise to a higher level in some areas only with
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of their
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parents
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genes.
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, some argue that most of the heroes who reached higher level are the best humans that spend most of their time developing
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and talents. To be more precise, a musician like "Beethoven", an athlete like "Usain Bolt" is not gifted people that born with the
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of talents their
parents
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. They reached their target only with the hard work training and spent their entire lives developing their
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. Thereby, the generation who need to gain some
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in sports or music must spend some of their time to develop those
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with their instructors. Owing to these factors, I believe as human beings we must give our full strength and encourage to the
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that we need to gain in our life rather than other opinions like relying on our genes that come up with our
parents
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.
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