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International tourism is becoming the world’s biggest industry. Unfortunately, it often creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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The chart illustrates, details about the five European
countries
 expenditure percentage for several basic needs in the year 2002. Overall, the vast majority of the expenses are allocated to Food, drinks and alcohol in all the five
countries
 while other consumers need to keep below 10% from the overall. In fact, a lower proportion of the spending pattern seems for all the five
countries
 are about Leisure and education activities that keep below 5% of the total.
Thus
, The consumption of food, beverage and tobacco are seemed nearly constant between Ireland (28.91%) and Tukey (32.14%) while Comparing to the same level of other three counties of Italy (16.36%) , Spain (18.80%) and Sweden (15.77%)
Moreover
, spending for the studies and leisure activities seem gradually plummet comparing to the other consumptions in all the
countries
. To be more precise, the educational and outdoor activities expenditures of all 5
countries
 keep constant between 1.98% and 4.35% while all other
countries
 spend their money for the other needs.
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