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people in university graduated in Canada are you agree?

#people #university #canada
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 in university graduated in Canada between 1992 and 2007. Overall, both genders experienced an upward trend throughout the period and the females hit the highest point at the end of the period. In the
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 of the period, the number of women graduating was around 100,000
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, it fluctuated from 1994 to1996 and it continued a significant rise to approximately 149,000
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 in 2006. In terms of men, the number of men who graduated was lower than the females by about 30,000
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 in 1992. After that, it slightly increased to under 80,000 in the
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 three years. it
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 declined to the same point like before and it had fluctuation during the
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 three years. In 2002 and 2004. The figure experienced a gradual growth at more or less 75000, 85000 respectively. It hit the lowest point of the females that graduated from Canada at 95,000
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