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The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, an make comparisons where relevant.

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The maps
bellow
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compares
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between
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, the layout of Porth
Harbour
 in 2000 with its appearance today.
Overall
, the
harbour
had
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 been into significant changes over the 20 years, with the addition of new facilities
such
 as a
hotle
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hotel
, cafes and shops,
while
 some structures,
such
 as Castel,
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 been removed. In 2000, the west side of the
harbour
 featured a car park and a marina for private yachts ,
along with
 showers and toilets.
By today
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,
marina
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 place changed to
be
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a fishing boats
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a fishing boat
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,
while
 the fishing
boats
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 place turned
to
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 be new marina,
However
, new cafes and a row of shops have been built near
to
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the lifeboat area. On the east
side
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th
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the
 castle disused
have
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 been
modify
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 to be a big hotel
includeda
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including
big
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 private beach which in 2000 was a public beach. On the north of the
harbour
 a little change has been into the dock area
make
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 it much bigger than the previous one.
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coherence cohesion
The introduction could be more concise and unified. Consider rephrasing it for better clarity and coherence.
task achievement
Be sure to clearly describe all significant changes and mention any similarities if present.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next. This will create a more seamless flow of information.
coherence cohesion
Try to minimize grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement and articles.
task achievement
The essay clearly describes significant changes and includes details about new and replaced facilities.
coherence cohesion
The essay effectively compares the two maps, noting the changes over time.

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