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some people believe that if is best to accept a bad situation. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

While some individuals are of the opinion that whenever
people
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 face a bad
situation
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, they should accept that, in others view, it is better to put our effort into improving the
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. From my perspective in some situations
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people
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 should try to make a
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 better, but in some other ,situations they should accept that. From a psychological perspective, by accepting a bad
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, there is a possibility that individuals would have a happier life.
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, when
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 are dissatisfied with their jobs, they would feel tedious at their workplace. As
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, a result they would not be able to do their tasks well.
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, by accepting a bad
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 as an unsatisfactory job, we would be able to focus on our duties. In
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 way, it is possible that we would get a raise or get a promotion. Some argue that in terms of shortage of
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, accepting a bad
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 lets us enjoy better from factors that are not related to
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 as spending quality of time with our family and walking in nature.
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, from my perspective,
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 need
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 to meet their basic needs
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 as food and house. In
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 aspect, individuals need enough
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 to survive. They should work a lot to earn
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 and change the
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.
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, trying to improve a
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 has advantages. As far as behavioural issues are concerned, by transforming a bad
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 into a good
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, our self-confidence confidence would increase. But in some cases, we do not have any chance to change a
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.
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, in developing
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generally there is a high unemployment rate.
People
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 should accept dissatisfactory jobs because there are no other job opportunities in their
countries
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. In conclusion, I believe that in some cases
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money
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people
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 should try to change a bad
situation
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. In some other situations
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 as having a dissatisfying job, if we live in influent
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countries
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 , we should accept a
situation
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 and if we live in a developed country, it is better to try to improve the
situation
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.

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