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Nowadays people get married and have kids in their thirties rather than when they are younger. Do you agree or disagree that this trend will benefit society?

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Nowadays
people
 tend to chase their career dreams
instead
 of getting married and have
kids
 before turning 30. I believe that
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 of
this
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 outweigh the negatives, and in the following essay, I would like to describe why. Having
kids
in
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 an early age was natural for centuries. There were many reasons for
such
 behaviour. The life expectancy was much shorter, so it was natural to settle down early and have a family.
However
, those days are gone, today's lifespan is much longer and more and more women chose their career above the family. In my opinion, the more educated and working
people
 a country
have
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, the better. Women almost all across the globe have
finally
 gained
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acces
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access
 to large international companies and are able to earn large sums of money.
This
 is something a government of the country will benefit from. To put it
in other words
, working women contribute to the economy of the country.
Furthermore
, it has been proven, that
people
 in their thirties are more likely to financially secure their families
,
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 than parents in
ther
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their
the
 twenties. Many
people
also
 back up
this
 opinion by the statement, that "older" parents are more responsible. On the basis of the above discussion,
i
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 believe that
people
 having
kids
 in their thirties are able to secure their
kids
 better, and
that is
 why I agree with
this
 trend.
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