Nowadays people get married and have kids in their thirties rather than when they are younger. Do you agree or disagree that this trend will benefit society?

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Nowadays
people
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tend to chase their career dreams
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of getting married and have
kids
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before turning 30. I believe that
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outweigh the negatives, and in the following essay, I would like to describe why. Having
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an early age was natural for centuries. There were many reasons for
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behaviour. The life expectancy was much shorter, so it was natural to settle down early and have a family.
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, those days are gone, today's lifespan is much longer and more and more women chose their career above the family. In my opinion, the more educated and working
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a country
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, the better. Women almost all across the globe have
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gained
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access
to large international companies and are able to earn large sums of money.
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is something a government of the country will benefit from. To put it
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, working women contribute to the economy of the country.
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, it has been proven, that
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in their thirties are more likely to financially secure their families
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than parents in
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their
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twenties. Many
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also
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back up
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opinion by the statement, that "older" parents are more responsible. On the basis of the above discussion,
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believe that
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having
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in their thirties are able to secure their
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better, and
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why I agree with
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trend.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial stability
  • emotional maturity
  • secure upbringing
  • career prospects
  • education and career development
  • lifetime earnings
  • job satisfaction
  • health outcomes
  • demographic shift
  • population growth
  • ageing population
  • parental preparedness
  • responsibilities of parenting
  • modern healthcare
  • capable of having healthy pregnancies
  • balancing population growth
  • establish careers
  • save money
  • healthier relationships
  • better parenting
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