Some people think that hosting an international sports event is good for the country, while some people think it is bad. Discuss both views and state your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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I have seen a lot of hosting an international athlete and I would say for me I love it because
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better health and it's will changes my lifestyle. But in other ways
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can have drug invite in help athletes have more energetic. Overall,
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has both negative and positive ways. in my whole
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I have been to many
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or even joined the
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as well. Hosting an
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is helped you to gains
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healthy lifestyle.
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because you usually have to set your own goals. So you have to
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more than normal people. Eat
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healthier and working out almost every day. Examples football as my brother he's a football player in Thai league so I have seen his daily life
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during the training days. He
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a lot more protein to get more muscles and often go to the gym. But
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, as you have seen a lot in the news. There are many
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provided in the events it basically to help the athletes have more energetic and flutter so that
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would benefit to athletes when they doing spots example
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if they using drugs they will have energy more than others so it
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them to run longer than other
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players. In conclusion, I would say hosting an International
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my brother but you may have to trade the risk of it. Would you like to sign up for any International
sports
events
next
time if you have a chance ?
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic boost
  • infrastructure
  • national pride
  • cultural showcase
  • inspire a generation
  • temporary boost
  • environmental concerns
  • sustainable planning
  • public funds
  • divert resources
  • tourism influx
  • job opportunities
  • sports development
  • public health
  • construction
  • strategic investment
  • global audience
  • hospitality
  • public services
  • cost-benefit analysis
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