People believe that there should be fixed punishments for each types of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both view and give your own opinion

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It has long been an issue how to decide the

punishment

for every

crime

cases

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. Some might say there should be defined

punishment

for all crimes by categories while others may think

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apply

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it is better to get

conclusion

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a conclusion

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considering the background and reason of each

crime

when we

finilize

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finalize

the

punishment

This

essay will discuss both views and the reason why I believe that people should define the

punishment

each by each, based on the situation. On the one hand, it may be very easy to conclude the

punishment

if it is fixed in advance by

crime

types. No matter who judge a

crime

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case, the result should be exactly

same

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the same

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unless the category of the

crime

is well identified.

However

, there might be

risk

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a risk

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for us to give too heavy or light

punishment

without checking the circumstances and motivation of the

crime

For example

, one drives

car

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a car

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too much fast because he or she likes driving like a professional while

other

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others

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do it to meet their lovers in danger in a hospital, could they be punished at the same level?

On the other hand

, some

adovocates

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advocates

that we should consider the situation and reason of each

crime

when we give someone the

punishment

for their guilty. It is primarily because there is

strong

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possibility that

story

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the story

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of it is unique and the law, defines the

punishment

, cannot cover all of

possible

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the possible

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scenarios. One good example is that in case an auto driven car with

sleeping

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a sleeping

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driver causes an accident for the

first

time, it must be tough to use fixed

punishment

since it's totally new.

In addition

, there is always

range

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a range

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punishment

described in the law and to decide the final result, we need something that can be used for the discussion in the court. In conclusion, even though there is

opinion

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an opinion

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that there should be

well defined

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punishment

for each

types

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of guilty, I believe the upsides of considering each situation of

crime

will outweigh the downsides.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
18Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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