People believe that there should be fixed punishments for each types of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both view and give your own opinion

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It has long been an issue how to decide the
punishment
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for every
crime
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cases
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. Some might say there should be defined
punishment
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for all crimes by categories while others may think
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apply
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it is better to get
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a conclusion
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considering the background and reason of each
crime
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when we
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finalize
the
punishment
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.
This
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essay will discuss both views and the reason why I believe that people should define the
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each by each, based on the situation. On the one hand, it may be very easy to conclude the
punishment
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if it is fixed in advance by
crime
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types. No matter who judge a
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crime
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case, the result should be exactly
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unless the category of the
crime
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is well identified.
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, there might be
risk
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for us to give too heavy or light
punishment
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without checking the circumstances and motivation of the
crime
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.
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, one drives
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too much fast because he or she likes driving like a professional while
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do it to meet their lovers in danger in a hospital, could they be punished at the same level?
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, some
adovocates
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advocates
that we should consider the situation and reason of each
crime
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when we give someone the
punishment
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for their guilty. It is primarily because there is
strong
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a strong
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possibility that
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of it is unique and the law, defines the
punishment
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, cannot cover all of
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the possible
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scenarios. One good example is that in case an auto driven car with
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a sleeping
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driver causes an accident for the
first
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time, it must be tough to use fixed
punishment
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since it's totally new.
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, there is always
range
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of
punishment
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described in the law and to decide the final result, we need something that can be used for the discussion in the court. In conclusion, even though there is
opinion
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an opinion
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that there should be
well defined
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punishment
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for each
types
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of guilty, I believe the upsides of considering each situation of
crime
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will outweigh the downsides.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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