Human activity has had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that this cannot be changed, while others believe actions can be taken to bring bout a change. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

The speculation has been going around that our activity has lead to
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destruction
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of the planet and the animal kingdom. Some of the
people
are convinced that these actions cannot be reverted while some still believe that there is still hope. In the upcoming
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will be discussing both
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of view. Is totally
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understandable
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lost faith in saving the planet and
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wildlife
because of the population boom that has been
occuring
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occurring
globally. With the increase of population the
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demand
for resources
also
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example,
people
need land in order to build
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housing
quater to do that forest have to be
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down which lead to many wild animals without habitats. Houses are not the only basic needs for the human being to sustain life food is
also
a key component. Many studied have been proven that
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carbon dioxide
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that leads to global warming which in turn destroy the planet the
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domestic
farming or poultry houses are one of the major
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for
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carbon dioxide
emission because they have raised
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of animal for meat and many other good every
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release
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carbon dioxide
as a metabolic waste product. After necessary need human
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extra
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length to feel special like wearing
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products
such
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of action leads to
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of animals.
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many
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and
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are taking drastic actions like asking
people
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products.
Goverment
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Government
officials are
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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