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Some people think shopping online is better, while other prefers going to the shops. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #shops
The debate has been going on that shopping from the comfort of your place is better in
comparision
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comparison
 to
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traditional
in
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in-store
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store
 shopping.In the upcoming paragraphs,
i
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 will be discussing
from
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the
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both
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 of
views
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. With the ongoing
pandemic
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 online
e commerce
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e-commerce
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 platforms
has
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 grown into
spolitlight
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spotlight
 quickly because of the social distancing rules and many post COVID restrictions. The key best feature for online shopping is that
this
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 the social interaction between people during these time of
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crisis
crisises
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. With the modern economic people tend to work longer hours so there is little to no time to go shopping but with online shopping buying clothes or many other necessities can be done right from the tip of your finger. With a busy
schedule
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 we tend to forget to go shopping for
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upcoming events but with online
shopping
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 the shopping spree can be done at any point
of
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 time.
However
, there
are
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 still drawback when it comes to
e commerce
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e-commerce
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 platforms like; there
has
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 been many stories speculating by the buyer that things
doesn't
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 turn out the way it should be. Or, the website can be a fraud which just
want
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 your bank detail. Another reason is that without seeing the item physically guessing size can be pretty hard as well.
Also
, online shopping is easily accessible by anyone the number of
item
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items
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 purchase daily can be over millions so things you just bought can be lost during
shpping
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shipping
 or your shipping can be delayed as well. When things or clothes
doesn't
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 turn out the way you expected
store bought
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 clothes and items can
be return
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 and refund easily To sum
up
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 buying or going shopping
through
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online or by
taditional
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traditional
 way depends on the individual circumstance because online shopping can give the social interaction you get while doing
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store
 shopping and
in
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store
 shopping can never give the comfort of
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online shopping.
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