The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is argued that the increasing popularity of internet shopping will eventually result in the disappearance of all retail outlets in urban areas.

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essay disagrees with

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statement. I believe that

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will continue to exist but that there will be significant changes to town and city centres. There are some products that will always be in demand for immediate purchase from a local shop. These include daily essentials

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as milk and bread,

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treats

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as wine, beer and confectionary that are often bought on impulse. The future of

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secured by the fact that shopping has become a form of entertainment, especially the buying of clothes and non-essential luxury items. People love to browse and purchase on a whim. What I envisage will change significantly is the nature of our high streets and city centres. I think that more and more retail chains will join the growing trend of relocating their

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to out-of-town retail parks. Former shopping streets will be repurposed as entertainment centres populated by

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, restaurants, take-ways and small live-music venues. In conclusion, I do not agree that the growing trend for shopping online will lead to the demise of

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. The real picture will see the continued relocation of most retail outlets from the high street and city centre and they will be replaced by entertainment spaces or converted to residential use.

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You have clearly stated your position on the topic in the introduction and conclusion, which is great. However, try to include a stronger thesis statement in the introduction to guide the reader more clearly on what to expect in your essay.

coherence and cohesion

Your points are mostly clear and flow well from one to the next. To improve, consider using more linking words to help the reader follow your ideas more easily. For example, words like 'therefore' and 'however' can connect your thoughts more effectively.

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While your ideas are supported, adding a few more specific examples or data could strengthen your arguments. For instance, mentioning specific retail chains that have moved could provide more weight to your claim about changing high streets.

coherence and cohesion

Your essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. This organization helps the reader follow your argument easily.

task achievement

You made good points about the importance of immediate purchase and the entertainment value of shopping, which shows your understanding of consumer behavior.

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Sentence 1 - Background statement
Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

237 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

e-commerce
brick-and-mortar
physical stores
online retailers
retail apocalypse
digital economy
consumer behavior
sustainability
commercial landscape
high-street
consumer trends
augmented reality
showrooms
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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

You recently went on a trip with a friend and you both took some photographs. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: • Ask your friend to send you a particular photograph • Explain why you need that particular photograph • Tell your friend what happened to your copy of it

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Your workplace requires an interpreter to translate from one language to another during meetings. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter recommend someone to act as an interpreter; explain why the person is qualified for that role; say how the person can be contacted.