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Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 sector. if Poor
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undevelop
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countries
, where poor people not getting proper help from rich
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 together and need to make proper
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perpose
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 only helps to poor
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 target to help people about
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education
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 and development. If those
countries
 population start getting
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education
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 use of the
money
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countries
also
 have to
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 nation so those
countries
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 jobs. As well as from rich
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 have to come together and need to make proper health system to those
countries
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african
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countries
 still suffer from some kind of disease like Ebola,
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 than other.
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 can say that
money
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everything
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every thing
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everything
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 for poor
nations
, but with that some kind of help
also
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 needed. And those
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 in form of health, education, developments and many more.
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  • developing nations
  • foreign aid
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  • technical assistance
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  • trade barriers
  • sustainable development
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