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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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It is widely claimed that travelling in a group with a
tour
guide
 is the best way to travel. While I agree that it will be more convenient if having a skilled person to lead the way in a new country, I believe that travelling independently
also
 brings a memorable experience. On the one hand, I agree that having a
tour
guide
 to lead a trip will help them to learn some new knowledge and
also
 widen the understanding about the meaning of some revolutionary figures, or popular statues.
For example
, when seeing something new and strange on the street or in a new place, the
tour
guide
 can tell them about the history, the culture, the people and
also
 answer some questions asked by tourists due to their professional comprehension in tourism and
also
 a wide range of knowledge about that country.
Moreover
, tourists do not need to consider the plan for a day: where to go, what
time
 to start or how to find well-facilitated hotels since all these tasks will be done meticulously by the
tour
guide
.
Hence
, all travellers can experience the trip without doing anything and they can feel enjoyable, comfortable until the end of the trip.
Furthermore
, they can meet a row of new individuals of many different cultures and make friends with them during the journey so that they probably avoid
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the feeling
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feeling
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 of loneliness, tediousness or a sense of homesickness.
Nevertheless
, I believe that travelling alone
also
 brings happiness to tourists.
Firstly
, they can schedule their plans that are suitable for their
time
 and do not have to take other people's
time
 into consideration. They can freely manage which places they should go
first
 for it to be worth visiting or they can control what
time
 to start off a day.
Besides
, travelling alone can
also
 help them to get out of their own comfort zone, to put themselves into
another social circumstances
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another social circumstance
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 so that they could be stronger and ever since, they will have a clearer understanding about their passion or their lifestyle.
Last
 but not least, travelling alone can help them to recognise the worth of
time
, to cherish every single moment that happened in their lives and to respect their present peaceful world. In conclusion, while travelling with a
tour
guide
 can give them a range of new knowledge, I do not believe that travelling independently could make their experience poorly.
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