Some people think employers should not care about the way their employees dress, but the quality at work. To what extent you agree or disagree?

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The one thing that should be highly noticed by employers in their employees, should be their quality at work. In my opinion, I firmly agree that bosses should only care about the services provided by their workers and nothing else. The essay below elaborately explains my perspective.

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with, a company only flourishes when the workers performing puts their hundred

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to accomplish things. And

this

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is only possible when the aura in the office revolves around services related stuff and not other things like dress code. To illustrate, it is often seen that when bosses make rules about dress code the staff becomes really disappointed

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the only topic for discussion among them becomes

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. They become disoriented and less focused.

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, they start performing badly.

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, targets are not met and after a certain

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the company loses reputation in the market.

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, it is very important to make sure that

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discussions are at priority in offices.

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, during

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the

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selects individuals whose dressing style is liked by them which turns out to be super disadvantageous in the long run for the establishment.

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, selecting someone for a higher post just based on their clothes and not their merits and potential causes them to lose some of the best labourers.

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, with no experienced

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the corporation performs awfully and experiences downfalls. After a certain time, it needs to be shut down.

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, employees should be selected based on their worthiness

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their clothes. To conclude,

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corporation is the one where

propreitors

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ignore every unnecessary

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such

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as dress code and only cares about their worker's qualities. As mentioned earlier in the essay, I hold the view that an employee's excellence should be highlighted not what they are wearing because well-dressed people might not have the adeptness required by an establishment.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 5.0

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4 paragraphs

312 words

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