Being a celebrity-Such as a famous film star or sports personality – brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?

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every profession has two facets and prominence

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are not exceptional.

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artist has both positive and negative aspects in people’s

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star or prominent player

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face many difficulties. Before giving my opinion I would like to review

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both state.

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and foremost, many people want to be

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famous because it gives the opportunity to live a dreamy ,luxurious

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to a person .Celebrity earns a huge amount of money and

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affluent

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.So they can effort every expensive , exclusive

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as car, house so on.

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, being a superstar means, they will have

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fans

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, followers who always support them if they are in trouble .Followers raise their

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, two years ago cricket

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Sakib Al Hasan was banned from all forms of cricket for two years due to involve in gambling,

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for protesting his

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authority has bounded to

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his punishment.

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but not the least,

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entertainer get

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to visit all over the

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world

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, They can use their fame for social well being .

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, a famous personality has to face many problems. They can not move in their daily

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like a common person. They have to always concern about their safety and security.

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entertainer

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have lack

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privacy .

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and media always look their eyes on them along

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they are curious to know about every

steps

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, a superstar cannot relax and don’t get mental peace. Even they spend their vacations confidentially.

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, a celebrity can not give quality time to family. To sum up, after

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discussion , I would say,

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entertainer or prominent personality lose their privacy as well as they have

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threaten ,

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however

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they

earns

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a lot of money and has a plethora of

fans

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along with they live a dreamy

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. So, in my perspective,

positive

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side of

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celebrity

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outweigh its negatives aspects.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

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Being a celebrity-Such as a famous film star or sports personality – brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Some say that due to heavy traffic, governments need to build more roads in metropolitan cities, while others argue this is not the right solution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that physical fitness of strong individuals and teams is the reason for most sports achievements. Others, however, think that mental attitude is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

Nowadays people waste a lot of food that was bought from shops and restaurants. Why do you think people waste food? What can be done to reduce the amount of food they throw away?

Some people believe that television is a powerful educational tool. Other people believe that television is nothing more than mindless entertainment and should be discouraged. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?