Being a celebrity-Such as a famous film star or sports personality – brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?

It is unrealistic to deny that
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every profession has two facets and prominence
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are not exceptional.
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artist has both positive and negative aspects in people’s
life
. There is an ongoing discussion among
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that a superstar like
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star or prominent player
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not only take
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but
also
face many difficulties. Before giving my opinion I would like to review
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both state.
First
and foremost, many people want to be
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famous because it gives the opportunity to live a dreamy ,luxurious
life
to a person .Celebrity earns a huge amount of money and
also
achieve
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affluent
life
.So they can effort every expensive , exclusive
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such
as car, house so on.
Secondly
, being a superstar means, they will have
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fans
, followers who always support them if they are in trouble .Followers raise their
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to their
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.
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, two years ago cricket
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Sakib Al Hasan was banned from all forms of cricket for two years due to involve in gambling,
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for protesting his
fans
authority has bounded to
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his punishment.
Last
but not the least,
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entertainer get
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to visit all over the
wolrd
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world
.
Moreover
, They can use their fame for social well being .
On the other hand
, a famous personality has to face many problems. They can not move in their daily
life
like a common person. They have to always concern about their safety and security.
In addition
,
entertainer
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have lack
of
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privacy .
Fans
and media always look their eyes on them along
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they are curious to know about every
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.
Thus
, a superstar cannot relax and don’t get mental peace. Even they spend their vacations confidentially.
Furthermore
, a celebrity can not give quality time to family. To sum up, after
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discussion , I would say,
although
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entertainer or prominent personality lose their privacy as well as they have
life
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they
earns
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a lot of money and has a plethora of
fans
along with they live a dreamy
life
. So, in my perspective,
positive
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side of
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celebrity
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outweigh its negatives aspects.
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