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In today' world,some prefer online courses whereas others prefer classroom teaching. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#world #prefer #courses #classroom
In the present world,
classroom
 learning involves physical interaction with a teacher, while online learning transfers
this
 component to
virtual
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the virtual
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 environment.
In contrast
,
human
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 appears real in front of the
audiance
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audience
 in the face to face method
instead
 of human visible only through the device
sreans
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screens
screen
such
 as computers and mobile phones.
However
, in the current situation ,most
of
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students
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the students
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 tend to use
internet
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the internet
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 to find new
thing
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things
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 rather than the
classroom
. In
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 I discuss both pros and cons of online distance learning processes.
Furthermore
 ,
this
 is a digital era where the most advance technological
equipments
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equipment
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 use
to
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deferent
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 purposes.
Firstly
 , no need to travel and saving both money and time
is
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are
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 the common
advantages
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 of online learning.
Inspite
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In spite
 of that,
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effective
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self motivation
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 and
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to find
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 answers and health effects are the prominent disadvantages. In short,there are negative and
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positive
 to the learner who gets all the things to study
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online.
On the other hand
,
conventional
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classroom
 method has both pros and cons too.
Although
this
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 superiority over the online and
collaborstion
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collaboration
 of with each other,some teachers give
favouration
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favouritism
 towards specified students.
Thus
, the above
mension
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mentioned
mention
 methods
also
 have merits and
dismerits
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demerits
. In summary, the processes given above has advantages and disadvantages to a person who
gain
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 knowledge. In
conclusion
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personally
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 I believe that
classroom
 learning is more powerful than online learning.
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