There is evidence that inhaling cigarette smoke causes health problems not only for smoker but for non-smokers who inhale other people’s smoke. In view of this, smoking should be banned in all public places, even though this would restrict some people’s freedom and action. What are your views?

It is undeniable that smoking is harmful to health not only for smokers but
also
for people who do not
smoke
.
Therefore
, it should be banned to encourage people to stop smoking,
although
this
will affect human’s rights. While I agree with
this
idea, I
also
think that we should consider the smoker’s freedom at the same time. On the one hand, smoking can cause detrimental issues. What I mean is that smoking releases toxic chemicals into the air which can cause lung cancer and fatal diseases. For those who do not
smoke
, it is not pleasant or healthy to smell
smoke
while eating in a restaurant or working in an office.
Moreover
, smoking
also
seriously affects children, not only in terms of health but
also
in terms of bad habits.
For example
, when a child sees people smoking in public
places
, they may think it is cool and try to
immitate
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imitate
.
On the other hand
, it is argued that banning smoking in public
places
will affect smokers’ freedom.
That is
to say, they would have the right to
smoke
wherever they want. What’s more, many
places
such
as bars and pubs will be affected as a significant number of their customers are smokers. The act of banning smoking in all public
places
will make them lose customers and alleviate their profit. All in all,
although
smoking has a negative impact on people’s health and should be banned in public areas, suitable
places
should be paid attention to so that smokers can find their own space for their enjoyment.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
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  • In general

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