There is evidence that inhaling cigarette smoke causes health problems not only for smoker but for non-smokers who inhale other people’s smoke. In view of this, smoking should be banned in all public places, even though this would restrict some people’s freedom and action. What are your views?

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It is undeniable that smoking is harmful to health not only for smokers but

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for people who do not

smoke

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, it should be banned to encourage people to stop smoking,

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will affect human’s rights. While I agree with

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idea, I

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think that we should consider the smoker’s freedom at the same time. On the one hand, smoking can cause detrimental issues. What I mean is that smoking releases toxic chemicals into the air which can cause lung cancer and fatal diseases. For those who do not

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, it is not pleasant or healthy to smell

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while eating in a restaurant or working in an office.

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, smoking

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seriously affects children, not only in terms of health but

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in terms of bad habits.

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, when a child sees people smoking in public

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, they may think it is cool and try to

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, it is argued that banning smoking in public

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will affect smokers’ freedom.

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to say, they would have the right to

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wherever they want. What’s more, many

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as bars and pubs will be affected as a significant number of their customers are smokers. The act of banning smoking in all public

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will make them lose customers and alleviate their profit. All in all,

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smoking has a negative impact on people’s health and should be banned in public areas, suitable

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should be paid attention to so that smokers can find their own space for their enjoyment.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

259 words

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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Some people believe that once a person becomes a criminal, he will always be a criminal. Do you agree with this statement? Provide specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.