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Describe a museum or exhibition that you particularly enjoyed visiting You should say: where the museum or exhibition is/was who you went with what you saw there and explain why you enjoyed visiting this museum or exhibition

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To be honest, in the distant past, I have always thought of visiting a
museum
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 as a boring thing and just a waste of time.
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, I had to change my opinion about it, as I felt really good and informed after visiting one of the well-known museums in Germany called
Pergamon
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the Pergamon
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museum
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. If my memory serves me right, I had a visit to Germany with my best friend around 2 years ago, after passing the final exam with flying
colors
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.
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 regarded as a gift that we rewarded ourselves for quite good achievements. And we spent little time in Germany visiting
Pergamon
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the Pergamon
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museum
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, which is an art
museum
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 located in Berlin. Actually, I was very much impressed by the unique structure of
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museum
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 and the way of preserving
history
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the history
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 of the past. The building itself is very impressive
,
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 and reminds
of
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me of
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 an ancient temple. I found that the highlight of the
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 visit was Ishtar Gate, which was discovered in the city of Babylon. In 1902, it was completely dismantled and transported to the Pergamon
museum
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. I was amazed by the height of Ishtar Gate with its dazzling blue
enameled
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 decorations and the magnificent lions in relief in gold
color
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. It was fantastic as I could think that I had stepped back thousands of years ago in Europe. It was
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magic and breathtaking spectacle. I’m really into visiting
this
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museum
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. Because when I got there, I was greeted with huge pieces of history. It gives me a chance to not only broaden my horizon but
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 get me away from the bustle and hustle of life.
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 worth the visit. And I remembered that the price was not too high and it included a free audio guide in many languages. In short, for me,
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 a world-class historical
museum
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. And I think that when you are in Berlin,
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 a must-see place for all. I hope I will have a chance to come back to
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museum
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 again.
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