In some areas of the US, a 'curfew' is impos,d, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. _ What is your opinion about this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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is
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in some regions of the USA. It is undeniable that in dangerous areas adolescents should be accompanied by adults at night. In
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tendency will be scrutinized and I will give my opinion regarding that. Everybody knows that there are criminal and safe districts.
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, the government should identify these areas and impose
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for teenagers, the main reason is
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. A good example here is that youngsters try to demonstrate their independence due to
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and other criminals use it for their own purposes
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as robberies or attracting minors in their gangs. Anyway, the consequences can be extremely dire. Taking
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region of Ukraine.
Curfew
was imposed from 2014 till 2020. Personally, I noticed that quantity of criminals dramatically increased in 2021,
therefore
, I absolutely agree that
curfew
is necessary for youngsters in the USA or
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other districts. The
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problem is that every kid must be accompanied by an adult. Probably, it is not useful for students who study or have
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in the evening but parents should attitude to that with understanding. Taking everything mentioned into account, in our final
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I can say that I absolutely agree that
curfew
has to in some areas. It is the best method to control children and their behaviour and, definitely, to control the level of criminal. Undoubtedly, the government can impose or delete
curfew
in various regions, it depends on
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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