Some people believe that travelling is a valuable experience; others say it is a waste of time and money. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #waste #time #money

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?

Some

people

Use synonyms

's argued that

Use synonyms

trip

Correct article usage

a trip

show examples

unique

Add an article

a unique

show examples

experience.

However

Linking Words

other group

Change the wording

another group

other groups

show examples

people

Use synonyms

thinks that it is

drastic

Add an article

a drastic

show examples

loss of money and

time

Use synonyms

This

Linking Words

essay will discuss

the

Remove the article

apply

show examples

both point of view.

To begin

Linking Words

with, most

people

Use synonyms

spending a lot of money on accommodation and their

time

Use synonyms

travelling.

In addition

Linking Words

, there is a delay in the duration of hours in travelling to their destinations. Airports detain customers due to quarantine

Remove the comma

apply

show examples

because many

people

Use synonyms

fly from the airport to other countries, if one of the

people

Use synonyms

gets sick,

then

Linking Words

everyone may be in danger.

For example

Linking Words

, my older brother buys tickets to Turkey, but on the day of

departure

Add a comma

,departure

show examples

they are delayed by 3 hours due to the illness of one of the clients.

therefore

Linking Words

my brother had to buy tickets a

second

Linking Words

time

Use synonyms

for another flight. On other hand, they can learn to survive in other countries and develop communication skills with other

people

Use synonyms

in addition

Linking Words

, during the

trip

Use synonyms

, they can learn the language of another country and learn more about other cultures.

For example

Linking Words

, when I came to Russia, I did not speak Russian, but communicating with Russian

people

Use synonyms

helps me to improve my speaking skills in Russian.

Moreover

Linking Words

, I learned more about their culture and now I can easily communicate with other

people

Use synonyms

. To summarize, I agree that the

trip

Use synonyms

is a waste of

time

Use synonyms

Although

Linking Words

this

Linking Words

trip

Use synonyms

can help

people

Use synonyms

improve their communication skills, learn to survive in other countries and learn more about another culture.

Submitted by zhadyra.serikbayeva2016 on Wed Sep 08 2021

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

10
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

245 words

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

Topic Vocabulary:

broadens horizons
cultural exposure
tolerance
self-reliance
overcoming challenges
language proficiency
sustainable tourism
environmental footprint
cultural homogenization
commercialization
responsible travel
global understanding
eco-friendly practices
accessible alternatives

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

7
band
Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle. Some people believe that both schools and parents are responsible for solving this problem, while others argue against this. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Living an unhealthy lifestyle has become a common practice among children, and it can be solved by their parents and teachers according to many people; however, others oppose this idea. Owing to proper supervision and more influence of schools and houses convinced me that children's bad lifestyle could be encountered easily by their parents and teachers.
<4
band
In some countries, the number of shootings increase becausee many people have guns at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
in many nations, criminal based guns are increased significantly. I am on the opinion that guns should be illegal for people. I complitery agree with this since it does not assiciated with security reasons.
4
band
Nowadays many people choose to be self- employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might be the case ? What could be the disadvantage?
It is a fact that nowadays many people choose to be self-employed rather that to work for a company or organisation due to several reasons. People have different approaches to this topic and this essay will shed light on both disadvanrages and possible consuquences.
5.5
band
you have arranged to visit a friend in England but an important event at home now means that you must change the dates of the visit. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • explain the important event • apologise for the situation • suggest a new arrangement
Hello, how are you doing, my bestie. I didn’t really want this, but I have to tell you something that might offend you. I wanted to warn you that I can’t go to see you this week in England.
6.5
band
some people think that arts subjects such as Drama and Music are an important part of a school education. Others, however, think that they are a waste of time and resources. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Nowadays, people argue about education issues especially the necessary subjects in a school. Some people think that arts subjects such as Drama and Music are important. However, others believe these subjects may be reduced from the course because of wasting time and resources. They think the time and resources should be used for other things better. This essay will discuss both views.

Some people believe that travelling is a valuable experience; others say it is a waste of time and money. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Your opinion

Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle. Some people believe that both schools and parents are responsible for solving this problem, while others argue against this. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In some countries, the number of shootings increase becausee many people have guns at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays many people choose to be self- employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might be the case ? What could be the disadvantage?

you have arranged to visit a friend in England but an important event at home now means that you must change the dates of the visit. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • explain the important event • apologise for the situation • suggest a new arrangement

some people think that arts subjects such as Drama and Music are an important part of a school education. Others, however, think that they are a waste of time and resources. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.