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All cars that burn fossil fuels should be banned and electric cars should replace them. Do you agree or disagree?

#cars #fuels
We are living in a world, where global pollution is seemingly increased due to many reasons. One of the main reasons is the air pollution, because of the petroleum-powered vehicles. Scientists are encouraging governments to ban those vehicles and introduce electric
cars
instead
. I disagree with that solution
,
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 because there are lots of
third
 world
countries
 who cannot supply basic requirements for their folks and
such
 electric
cars
 are expensive than normal vehicles. The primary reason is that most developing
countries
 do not provide basic infrastructure to the people living in rural areas, including running water and electricity. Even though people are able to afford
cars
, they cannot use them because they lack access to basic utilities. And It will become a white elephant.
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 if they drive their zero-emission
cars
, they must recharge after a short distance of driving. For ,that they need recharging stations in almost every part of the
country
. Those facilities are like dreams in
countries
 like Sri Lanka
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 because it is a developing
country
 with less than 70 per cent of the
country
 has electricity. And people live many days without electricity. So there will be a practical issue of using
such
 a mechanism.
Secondly
, electric
cars
 are more expensive than
cars
 using patrol. Folk who lives in a developing
country
 will certainly not be able to buy
such
 environmentally friendly
cars
 due to the pricing. In conclusion, I disagree with the topic because electric-powered
cars
 are not practicable in many
countries
. Whereas fossil-fuelled
cars
 are more affordable and can be practically used on the roads.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fossil fuels
  • emissions
  • air pollution
  • greenhouse gases
  • climate change
  • sustainable
  • renewable
  • electric vehicles
  • battery technology
  • charging infrastructure
  • range anxiety
  • government support
  • incentives
  • subsidies
  • renewable energy
  • environmental impact
  • energy efficiency
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