The Spread of multinational companies and the resulting increase of globalization produce positive effects for everyone. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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” allows businesses or other
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to develop international influence or start operating on an international scale. I completely agree that
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era of multinational business produces positive effects across the world.
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, it has big hands for spreading technology and Innovations. Many countries around the world remain constantly connected, so the knowledge and technological advances travel quickly. Because knowledge
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transfers so fast,
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means that scientific advances made in Asia can be at work in the United States in a matter of days.
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, it develops higher standards of living across the globe. Developing nations experience an improved standard of living
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thanks to
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.
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the World Bank, extreme poverty has decreased by 35% since 1990.
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, the target of the first Millennium Development Goal was to cut the 1990 poverty rate in half by 2015.
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was achieved five years ahead of schedule, in 2010. Across the globe, nearly 1.1 billion
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have moved out of extreme poverty since that time.
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, access to new cultures has become possible.
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makes it easier than ever to access foreign cultures, including food, movies, music, and art.
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free flow of
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, goods, art, and information is the reason you can have Thai food delivered to your apartment as you listen to your favourite UK-based artist or stream a Bollywood movie.
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,
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allows companies to find lower-cost ways to produce their products. It
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increases global competition, which drives prices down and creates a larger variety of choices for consumers.
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costs help
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in both developing and already-developed countries live better on less money.
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, some of the negative impacts include they may pollute the environment, run risks with safety
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poor working conditions and low wages on local workers.
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,
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minor negativity is negligible when we consider positivity. In conclusion,
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totally agreed that the development of cross-national businesses and
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accompanying
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could provide
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varieties
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with various
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service options, which make our lives easier and better.

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