Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, there has been much discussion revolving around the issue, whether it is better to provide
seperate
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separate
education for
both
genders or if it is better to allow boys and girls to attend mixed
schools
. In the following
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I would like to discuss
both
points of view. Personally, I am in favour of the letter view.
To begin
with the bright side of
this
issue, I believe, that attending mixed-sex education has many beneficial aspects.
For example
, it is crucial to let
kids
socialize with
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opposite gender.
Moreover
, it is crucial to let them learn the difference in
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behaviour of
both
genders. Socializing in
mixed
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a mixed
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group of
kids
is beneficial for the mental growth of an individual. It has been proven by a
reseearch
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research
among 5 different mixed
schools
in the United States, that not only are their
kids
able to deal with daily situations better than
kids
from separate
schools
, they were
also
able to create healthier
realionships
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relationships
relationship
during their teenage years.
On the other hand
, attending mixed
schools
have
also
some drawbacks. Teenagers start to explore their sexuality and are attracted by the other sex, which often leads to unwanted
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from school duties. Many people
also
argue, that it is easier to work with
kids
from single-sex
clasrooms
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classrooms
,
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because
both
genders tend to have the same interests and hobbies, which,
on the other
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has never been proven. On the basis of the above discussion, I believe, that mixed
schools
are better
preparation
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to
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real-life situations and
that is
why I agree with the statement, that
kids
benefit more from
atttending
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attending
mixed
schools
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • co-education
  • gender segregation
  • peer pressure
  • academic performance
  • gender stereotypes
  • discrimination
  • social skills
  • teamwork
  • collaboration
  • diversity
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