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These day many people leave their country to work abroad and take their family with them. Do you think benefits of this outweigh disadvantages in term of family development.

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Working abroad has been common in our daily life since travelling through countries, or even through continents is easy due to airway.
Therefore
, when someone works far from home, they tend to take their spouses and children, or even their parents along
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.
This
 is a controversial topic in
term
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 of the benefit of country development, but in the family facet, the advantages outweigh the drawbacks. When
people
 mention the obstacles about moving to another country, it is said that except for workers who are accustomed
with
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 living abroad, others would find
difficult
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it difficult
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 to adjust their lifestyle in order to fit the new environment. These include differences in cultures, manners and languages, which are
embeded
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embedded
 in their personalities.
However
, the world is becoming globalized these days,
people
 are friendly and almost got used to
interact
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 with foreigners, so there might be drawbacks in the
first
 time, but not in the latter. Other noticeable benefits of moving out to
other country
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another country
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 with family are worthy.
Firstly
,
people
 can live with their beloved family, it is crucial for improving mental health, especially for children who have
father
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a father
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 or mother working abroad.
Secondly
,
people
 have
chance
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 to experience other cultures and languages, which academically benefits individuals in the long run. In conclusion, moving abroad is not an easy decision
to
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 many
people
, especially with their family, but I believe it has more benefits for the families than disadvantages in the end.
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