Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and more creativity than reading. To what extent do you agree? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer.

Nowadays, parent’s wants to nurture their children by engaging them
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as it will develop their motor and cognitive skills.
However
, people think recreation is essential for the development of young
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to reading. I totally agree with
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notion, why inactivity is more beneficial for the betterment of
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instead
of reading and I will state my reason with examples.
To begin
with, it is not necessary that reading will help to develop various skills at the same time.
Furthermore
, there is not any fixed age of learning or reading concept
also
as we know that youngster learn many of activities by observing, experiment and so forth.
Thus
, not only by reading but
also
by adopting various
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the children learn more fitness ideas and physical exercise. To illustrate, when
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child will force to read books or any materials
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they used to avoid the task and they
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more interest by playing games or activities.
As a result
, they can develop social and mental skills in their life.
Secondly
,
in addition
, by playing they can improve various qualities
such
as leadership, self-confidence, decision making and so on.
Besides
,
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them to make decisions and solve problems as well as
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allows kids to develop confidently and independently. In the same way,
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pursuing hobbies like craft, art, music, dance and so forth will motivate
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contribute
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project
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by innovative ideas and they feel relaxed by doing,
experiment
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in
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world.
For instance
, through
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experienced
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self-development
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the offspring will be surrounded by
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with
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attitude, learn from mistakes, collaborate with others. In conclusion,
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that pursuit action
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very
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important role during primary education.
In contrast
, students can be more
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on reading from their secondary education.
Likewise
, they can develop creativity or imagination and
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become an ideal and successful citizen of the country.
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