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Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and more creativity than reading. To what extent do you agree? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer.

#activity #child #skills #creativity
Sometimes I thought that making fun
activities
 for children can improve
the
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skills
 and
creativity
, but
mostly
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 argued that it can only be done by reading. While I believe that kids can develop better
skills
 and more
creativity
 while they enjoying the
activities
. On one side, the people often believed that the study and reading is the only option to improve
skills
 and
creativity
. But
the
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 recent study
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shown
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 that only reading should not
be improve
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 kid’s
skills
.
The more
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 reading can helps in
develop
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 vocabulary. I think that reading can be done according to the age, the teenagers can read more than children with better understanding. On
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other
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 side, involving games may
also
helps
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 in developing better
skills
 and
creativity
. Let’s take an example, a boy can learn
alphabet
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 by reading while he turns one and a baby can learn
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alphabets
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, colour, numbers by just watching videos. When the kids have learning with
fun
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 they improve their
skills
.it
also
make
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 tasks easy
remembering
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 and more interesting. So, enjoying
activities
 while learning booster in improving
skills
 and
creativity
. So, I concluded that there are many options for
develop
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skills
 and
creativity
 in kids but the best one is by doing enjoyable
activities
 rather than reading.
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