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You recently organized an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel

#company #place #hotel #feedback #participants #food #lunch #manager
I am writing
this
 in connection with the conference we had at your place on 26th August 2020. I really thank and appreciate you for hosting
this
 event successfully. Herewith I write the summary of feedbacks that received from our clients who participated in the event on that day.
Majority
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 of participants mentioned the ambience of the hotel. They liked it and felt that, the best place for having a long meeting with the appropriate table arrangement.
Moreover
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 the best part is the music which played in the background that was really mind-blowing.
Also
 ,needless to say, the service you provided was excellent and all the staff were friendly.
On the other hand
, in relation to food, we were super excited by the way of presenting the dishes but very disappointed to find that the rice was not cooked well and
also
 there was no option for pure vegetarians. That led to receive few negative comments on the restaurant. As we are your regular customer, I would like to tell some suggestions based on our
last
 experience. Please make sure the food items which you serve are well cooked prior to
reach
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 the consumer.
In addition
, it would be great to introduce some vegetable dishes so that you could attract vegetarians
also
. Thank you for giving the matter your attention
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