Doctors recommend that older people should get regular exercise. However many older people do not take enough exercise. What could be the reason for this? What can be done to encourage them to take exercise?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • physical activity
  • low-impact exercise
  • chronic conditions
  • senior-friendly
  • public awareness campaigns
  • group exercise classes
  • motivation
  • health maintenance
  • financial constraints
  • supervised workout sessions
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