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As a country develops, people tend to buy more cars. Do the advantages for the individual outweigh the disadvantages for the environment?

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A purchase of automobiles
such
 as cars increases drastically with the evolution
on
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 a nation,
however
, there are both merits and demerits associated
for
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people
 with
owing
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owning
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 a
car
.
This
 essay will discuss how the merits of owning a
car
 by
people
 surpass its disadvantage. On the one hand, with the development of a nation the purchasing power of an average individual
increase
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 significantly which encourages them to own a
car
 which makes them dependent and lazy in a long run.
This
 is because after experiencing a comfort of a
car
,
people
perfer
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prefer
 driving over walking even for short distances that may
increases
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 their reliance on their vehicle and may
also
minimizes
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 their physical movement .
For
instance
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 some
people
 become obese as they neglect walking and always prefer to travel in their
car
.
Hence
, owning a
car
 may result in some minor detrimental consequences on an individuals health.
On the other hand
,
although
 there are numerous advantages of owning a
car
, the fundamentals are
the
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convenience and comfort. It means a longer distance can be covered in a short span of time without being impacted by
the
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environmental factors
such
 as pollution, temperature, and weather.
In addition
, cars are comfortable and even after driving for
longer
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 hours, one may not experience fatigue.
For instance
,
people
 owning
a
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car travel
a car journey
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car
 travel across nations for their work purpose as well as for leisure time which makes their overall travelling experience comfortable and convenient.
Consequently
,
although
 owning in a developing nation may decline the walking habit of an individual and make them more dependent, endless benefits of comfort and convenience cannot be neglected.
Therefore
, the merits of owning a
car
 undoubtedly surpass its demerits for individuals.
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