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Some industry leaders believe children should learn computer programming in primary school. To what extent you agree or disagree with this situation.

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Computers have become an important part of our life. Some industry leaders opine that children should learn
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 programming in primary school , I agree with
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 situation as knowing about
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 programming has many benefits for students. With respect to advantages , a child should learn
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 programming at school because in a rushy life due to less
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 he can complete his work in few minutes because working on the
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 is very less
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 consuming as in future
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 he would be able to save his
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 by working on the
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. In
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 modern ,era every individual should know how to use a
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’s because most of the work can be done on them and when a person gets mature it becomes a little bit difficult to learn
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 programming due to a busy schedule.
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- Now a days license appointment could be taken on a
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 if an individual knows how to make an appointment he could save
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 and money . Learning
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 programming has disadvantages too, as many of the children’s observe things in a wrong way and they start miss using the
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’s so it could put bad impact on them but the problem can be solved by the parent’s if they keep an eye on their child. In conclusion, teaching
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 programming at primary school has both benefits and drawbacks but benefits are more. I agree with
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 opinion
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 should be taught in primary school’s
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