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Some people think that managers alone should make decisions in the company, while others think that employees should be involved in the decision-making process too. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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“The
company
 is like a big clock, and clock works properly when all gears move synchronically”. – from “The Incredibles”. I am sure that everyone who watched The Incredibles can surely say who spoke out these words. It was Bob’s (one of the movie’s main characters) Boss’s expression about Bob’s extraordinary behavior at his job. Undoubtedly, he was right.
Company
 means a collaboration of many coworkers working on certain project, which means that all principal stuff in the organization has to work together for the greater results. To reach
such
 result every person should be doing his own specific tasks: for
employees
 they are paper work and documentation checking, while for
managers
 they are looking at the
company
’s current state. At
this
 point people divided in thoughts. Ones say that if
managers
 spectate at
company
’s state, they
also
 must make all
decisions
 in the
company
, while others say that
decisions
 must be made by all
company
 members including
employees
.
Employees
’ job varies depending on contract’s content, but in each contract, there is no point about making
decisions
. So, what does it mean? Does it mean that
this
 duty lays on
managers
? So, let’s know. According to information from internet,
managers
’ job includes: planning and promoting the daily schedule of
employees
 and the business, interview, hire, and coordinating
employees
, and no point about decision making, which means making
decisions
 is not their primary business.
Nonetheless
, in order to make close-knit team, they make exception and help their junior comrades by taking all duty to themselves.
Managers
 respect their
employees
 and always search a way to improve their condition, so
this
 is why they do not mention the problem of decision making. Every person can be a manager, which means you have to be able to make
decisions
 for all
company
’s sake.
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