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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

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In certain countries, more
people
 are getting excited about the history of the apartments they live in. In my opinion, it is
the
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 good opportunity to get
people
 more careful while choosing their houses and it will be grade idea to spread to the masses.
People
 are now becoming more interested to know the past of their
house
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 or buildings. There are a lot of reasons to find it.
For example
, to know how historical valuable are their
house
 or is it
safely
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 to live in. If the
house
 is created
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in
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invaluable
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valuable
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 date like during the war or revolutions, the price for
this
 apartment will immediately
rises
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 and it will be profitable to sell it.
Otherwise
, it can be the reason to move, if there lived a murder or happened a horrible event.
That is
 why it is important to be aware of
history
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 of
house
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 you live
.
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 There should be
the
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 way how
people
 find it
,
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 if they want to know. In my view, the most possible way is to read about it in the city archives. Because there should be
the
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 list of the important events
happened
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.
In addition
, you can search it
in
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 the internet and you have a chance to probably find information there. Maybe there are
another
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 ways to research it, but I think they are not
reliable
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source
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. Taking everything to conclude, there are a lot of reasons and ways on finding out the history of the apartment you live
.
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 Each person had their own reasons to do it.
People
 should get excited about the past of buildings and popularize it among citizens.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Historical research
  • Genealogy
  • Architectural styles
  • Heritage
  • Relics
  • Oral history
  • Archival records
  • Museum exhibits
  • Historical societies
  • House tours
  • Renovation projects
  • Original blueprints
  • Careful documentation
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