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Some people say that public libraries should be free; otherwise they are just a waste of money, especially because modern technologies and the Internet allow easy access to resources. Discuss and give your point of view.

#people #libraries #waste #money #technologies #internet #access #resources #point
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 of
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 and online
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 there is no need for public
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, causing waste of tax money and space that could be used for more relevant purposes, whereas others tend to believe that
libraries
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 should be available for every citizen and important to society. There are a
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 and mostly includes
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 updates on topics. Despite that, some of the oldest
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 archives in most cases can only be found in local
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, some
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 may be restricted from
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 as well as just have a preference for
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 versions of books. On the one hand, many prefer
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 in needed situations. It is a
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 easier and faster than spending hours in
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 full of books looking
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 an answer to a question or even finding
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research. Finding a source for research with
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 relevant topic is a
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 harder in
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 cause of
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 limitation of budget and space.
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, nowadays most authors rather publish their works online. It is a
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 less costly and does not require a
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 of work, compared to publishing it on
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. Most of
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 science researches are published
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 various
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 magazines. Not to mention, special sites as google scholar storing those works and providing easier
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 to them.
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, reading off of a screen will never give the same experience as
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 text on
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/ Most
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 notice that they are more concentrated on
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the book
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 version
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 while reading on their phone was
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 cause of many apps and notifications they get. Buying those
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 could cost a fortune and is not ideal if it is a
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 read, that’s why
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 use
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, it I important to mention that some citizens simply don’t have
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, due to financial all other issues, and tend to turn to public
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 in search
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 information. In conclusion, online
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 might be the most relevant and convenient source, but there is no need to be shutting down public
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, cause they’re still might be helpful and interesting for groups of
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