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many people are working at home rather than work places. Some people believe this will bring benefits to the workers and their families but other suggest it will cause stress in the home rather than work place. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Nowadays, a lot of people prefer
work
 at
home
 than at the offices and they suggest that it can bring many benefits to the workers and
their
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 relates.
However
, other people believe
this
 trend
have
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 some drawbacks and can
be cause
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because
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 stress in the
home
.
This
 essay will
ellaborate
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elaborate
 the main advantages and disadvantages of working from
home
. To start with, many companies allow the working from
home
 for their staff for several reasons.
First
 and foremost, some of the workers feel better when they
work
 from
home
 due to the fact that there is a good,
convinient
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convenient
 and familiar environment and it can
be
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because
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cause
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the cause
a cause
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 of
favorable
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work
. Another good thing about freelancing is that free
work
 schedule and the possibility to spend more time with the family and relates. There is a common type of
work
 in our generation,
for example
,
targetologists
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herpetologists
, it-workers and even teachers prefer
freelance
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.
Nevertheless
, there
is
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are
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 some
drawbaks
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drawbacks
drawback
in
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to
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this
 kind of
work
.
First
 of all, many people feel more freedom of
work
's timing and cannot do all of the planned
work
 which leads to ineffective
work
.
In addition
,
work
 at the office has a number of advantages,
such
 as job prospects,
the
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 good team and
close
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a close
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 relationship with the boss.
Moreover
,
the
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apply
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freelancing
erase
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boundaries
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the boundaries
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 of
work
/life balance and is affected
,
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 leading
stress
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to stress
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. Taking everything into account,
the
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working at
home
have
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has
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 some benefits and drawbacks, and it all depends on the employee itself and its relationship to
this
 type of
work
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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