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Some people think children have the freedom to make mistakes, while other people believe that adults should prevent children from making mistakes. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

#people #children #freedom #mistakes #adults
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Decision
 making is an important aspect of human life from birth to death bed. When
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considering
 childhood,various
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decisions
 are
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 by
children
 which are right as well as wrong. The
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degree
degrees
 of freedom for
mistakes
 that a child should be allowed has been a
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 subject Allowing
children
 to make
mistakes
 have several advantages and disadvantages.
Firstly
 ,one
possitive
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positive
 of allowing
mistakes
 is that it allows
children
 to learn and gain valuable experience.
secondly
 ,they become aware
of
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the continuously allowing
children
 to make
mistakes
 can
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resulted
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 them being addicted or face
life threatening
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 situations. For
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example,if a child is
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allowed
 to make errors on road,it can eventuality lead to serious accidents as well.
On the other hand
,total involvement of adults and blocking all
mistakes
 from
children
 could make them safe and improve
bond
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 between
perents
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parents
 and
children
 as well.
However
,once the
children
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 set free
to
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 society ,
then
 they may find it difficult to
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 challenges on their own. Put it simply, they will be more
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 on their parents rather than being independent.
Moreover
,
children
 will
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lose
love
 the opportunity of learning
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through
 their
mistakes
 when their parents block
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 from happening every time. In conclusion, allowing
mistakes
 can be a
learningadvantage
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learning advantage
 for
children
 while
limit
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 of those
mistakes
 needed to be judged properly by an adult to ensure
safely
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at
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 the child. In my opinion ,it should be
mix
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 of allowing and not allowing
mistakes
 depending on the situation that makes a smart person in future.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • freedom to make mistakes
  • critical thinking skills
  • lifelong learning
  • guided learning environment
  • resilience
  • independence
  • overprotective
  • dependency
  • problem-solving skills
  • confidence
  • negative consequences
  • learning process
  • personal growth
  • trial and error
  • balance safety and learning
  • development
  • support and guidance
  • empowerment
  • risk-taking
  • life lessons
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