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In many developing countries, there is a problem with declining quality of air and water from both industry and construction. What measures could be taken to prevent this?

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As most of us are informed nowadays, the progress is unstoppable and a lot of countries at the moment are growing and evolving with high development rates.
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supplied
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 with ecology degradation because of
industry
 and
construction
. Let’s pause our everyday endless run and think together about what can be done here to save mother Earth.
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 biggest problem here is
industry
standards
 which sometimes are not green enough. But
also
 in some developing
countries
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 these
standards
 are not met at all because applying
it
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them
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 costs extra money for
industry
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. To avoid
air
 and
water
 pollution strong
standards
 for filtering and cleaning in
industry
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 areas should be applied. And to let everyone be sure that
this
 works there is public monitoring should be established. While buildings, roads and other infrastructure
construction
is
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 not connected with production processes but it
also
 affects
water
 and
air
 quality a lot. During some
constructions
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 terraforming and landscape works affect
water
 cycling in the area directly but what is true in any case -
construction
 vehicles work on gasoline and pollute
air
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the air
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 a lot all the time while working. To keep
air
 and
water
 clean ethical electric machines should be used for
construction
 works and
also
 constructions themselves planned to be embedded into the landscape with saving existing forests, lakes, rivers, and hills with mountains. To summarise, we can conclude that developing ecology
standards
, establishing public monitoring for
industry
 processes, and putting thinking of nature preservation in the
first
 place during all kinds of
construction
 could do the trick and save planet Earth for future generations.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pollution control regulations
  • emissions
  • discharges
  • green technology incentives
  • environmentally friendly practices
  • renewable energy sources
  • sustainable materials
  • waste management policies
  • recycling processes
  • environmental monitoring
  • compliance with environmental standards
  • public awareness campaigns
  • environmental protection
  • infrastructure upgrades
  • modern building techniques
  • international environmental organizations
  • air and water quality management
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