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The crime rate among teenagers has increased dramatically in many countries . Discuss some possible reasons for this increase and suggest solutions.

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In recent decades, more teenagers have engaged in criminal movements, which puts pressure on society.
This
 essay will look at some primary causes of
this
 and offer some possible solutions to the problem. There are several reasons for the rising frequency of offences among youngsters. Primarily, is it often said that youngsters may opt for harmful vices if
parents
 do not monitor their actions? Some
parents
 have a hectic schedule in their workplace,
thus
 neglecting the responsibilities to their children. Because of inadequate guidance, these youngsters socialize with other people in society.
For instance
, children develop a relationship with their friends in school as it is considered their
second
 home. Friends share the same habits and passions,
such
 as venturing into illegal substances and criminal behaviours.
For example
, In 2014, statistical data showed that about 80% of drug takers are between the ages of 12 to 18 and are not feeling safe and secure in their homes.
Furthermore
, teenagers who watch programs or movies related to crimes may do similar criminal activities just for fun.
However
, it can never deny that the
parents
 and the employers can address
this
 social dilemma.
First
 of all, the government, educational institutes and guardians should play their role collectively to keep teenagers away from
such
 malicious and criminal activities.
First
 of all,
parents
 can give more attention to their children by having a weekly family outing to different places. The educational institutes can play a vital role in
this
 regard keeping busy students in extracurricular exercises. The government should conduct awareness seminars about the dangers and adverse impacts of bad habits in life. It is the responsibility of the law enforcement agencies to punish and fine for any misconduct or misbehaviour. To conclude, it is clear that there are various reasons for
this
 rise in teenage crime, but solutions are available
on the other hand
, too.
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