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You want to learn a language. There is a teacher near to where you live. Write a letter to the teacher. In the letter: say how you came to know about him/her explain why you want to learn ask what help they can offer.

#language #teacher #offer
Dear Teacher, I am writing to inquire about
French
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the French
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Classes
 That you are conducting
on
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at
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weekend
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the weekend
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 as Night
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. One of my
close
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 has given me your contact details and I believe that you are the best in the business around the town. I just wanted to start
classes
 from the beginner level. Since
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apply
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I
have
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 not familiar with the French language and looking
someone
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for someone
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 who can guide me up to
moderate
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a moderate
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 level with more practical sessions. My purpose
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 learning French language is certainly to Appling for vacancies available in Canada. Which,
suitable
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is suitable
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 for my current employment and my only obstacle is French language Fluency. I would like to know about the availability of
fast track
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 courses and course fees.
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, I wanted to know
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,
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if will
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 there be any possibility
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of starting
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 the
classes
 from Next month onwards? I look forward to hearing from you soon. Best Regards, Nalinda.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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