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Would you prefer to stay in one company or change companies at one point in your career life? What are the advantages and disadvantages of both scenarios? Give specific details and examples to support your opinion.

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 of all, there are
people
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 who definitely want to spend
the
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their
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 whole
life
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by
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working in one
company
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 but there are those who want to frequently change their workplace. I admit that there are upsides and downsides of both points of view. As far as I am concerned, It is better to change companies at some point in
the
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 carrier
life
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. I believe that there is a certain moment in your
life
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 when you realize that you did your best
on
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 your
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 and you want to move on and apply for another
position
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. Sometimes you need more experience,
usually
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people
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 find their job not interesting any longer and they search for other options. Unfortunately, it may happen that the
company
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, where the person currently works, cannot offer you another
position
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 that fits your desire. In
this
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 case, most
people
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 quit their jobs.
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, it is considered to be inappropriate in
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society when the person cannot stay in one
company
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 for a long period of time.
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 some companies are very loyal and provide the best conditions possible, there are
people
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 who always want to find
the
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position
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that is
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 well-paid and is easier
,
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 or find
the
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company
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 that offers higher salaries.
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, there are
people
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 who are eager to work for one
company
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 in their
life
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. They get used to working rules and are reluctant to find something new. It is possible that they have no ambition to try something extraordinary and are happy to develop and improve their skills in the
company
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 where they work. I agree that sometimes the work-
life
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 balance is more important than the wish to pursue a new career. In conclusion, I want to say that I would prefer to change the
company
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 if there is a need for it. The advantages of
this
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 approach are more important to me than the things that I may lose when
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 to leave a job.
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