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Would you prefer to stay in one company or change companies at one point in your career life? What are the advantages and disadvantages of both scenarios? Give specific details and examples to support your opinion.

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First
 of all, there are
people
 who definitely want to spend
the
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 whole
life
by
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working in one
company
 but there are those who want to frequently change their workplace. I admit that there are upsides and downsides of both points of view. As far as I am concerned, It is better to change companies at some point in
the
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 carrier
life
. I believe that there is a certain moment in your
life
 when you realize that you did your best
on
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in
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 your
position
 and you want to move on and apply for another
position
. Sometimes you need more experience,
usually
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people
 find their job not interesting any longer and they search for other options. Unfortunately, it may happen that the
company
, where the person currently works, cannot offer you another
position
 that fits your desire. In
this
 case, most
people
 quit their jobs.
On the other hand
, it is considered to be inappropriate in
the
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society when the person cannot stay in one
company
 for a long period of time.
Although
 some companies are very loyal and provide the best conditions possible, there are
people
 who always want to find
the
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position
that is
 well-paid and is easier
,
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 or find
the
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company
 that offers higher salaries.
However
, there are
people
 who are eager to work for one
company
 in their
life
. They get used to working rules and are reluctant to find something new. It is possible that they have no ambition to try something extraordinary and are happy to develop and improve their skills in the
company
 where they work. I agree that sometimes the work-
life
 balance is more important than the wish to pursue a new career. In conclusion, I want to say that I would prefer to change the
company
 if there is a need for it. The advantages of
this
 approach are more important to me than the things that I may lose when
decide
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 to leave a job.
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