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The bar shows the percentage of people going to cinemas in one European country on different days. What extent do you agree or disagree ?

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Given is the line graph that illustrates the proportion of customers going to movies theatres in a particular country on different days from 2003 to 2007. Overall, it can be deduced from the chart that the
day
 witnessed the highest number of
people
 going to
cinemas
 is Saturday, while the opposite was true for days in the middle of the week which are Monday, Wednesday and Thursday. As can be seen in the chart, in the research period,
people
 usually went to
cinemas
 at weekend. The
figure
 for Saturday in the year 2005 stood at 45%, higher than that of the other years, which were approximately 43% in 2007 and 40% in 2003. On Sunday, the year 2003 experienced 30% of customers relaxing in movies theatres, slightly lower than that in 2007 at about 33% and in 2005 in around 35%. Especially, the percentage of those who went to
cinemas
 on Friday in all 3 research years was the same which was reported at 30%. Look at the graph in more detail, in the year 2003, Monday is the
day
 undergoing the lowest percentage of
people
 coming to
cinemas
, on the
next
day
this
figure
 moderately increase to 20%, before slightly declining by about 5% on Wednesday, from which point it continually decrease to approximately 13% on Thursday. In 2005, the
figure
 for the proportion of
people
 coming to
cinemas
 was recorded at under 15% on the
first
day
 of the week,
then
 it witnessed a slow increase of 5% on Tuesday, prior to significantly dropping to the lowest
figure
 on Thursday.
Finally
, the proportion of customers coming to movies theatres stood at about 13% on Monday, steeply rose to under 20% after one
day
 and rapidly touched the lowest point at under 10% on Wednesday before recovering to the percentage which almost equals with the
first
figure
.
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