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Levels of youth crime are increasing rapidly in most cities around the world. What are the reasons for this, and suggest some solutions.

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We all have to admit that, there is a rapid increment in the juvenile crime rate across the
world
. Child
abusing
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, social media and financial situations are the most common issues among the youth.
Hence
, the increasing crime rate could be decreased with some appropriate
measured
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measures
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 taken by the government, parents and teachers to tackle the issue. That will be discussed in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin
 with, there are many children getting abused in society
as well as
 at home. And when they grow up they see the
world
 as an unsecured place to live.
Therefore
, they try to change the
world
 on their own terms. For ,example if a reputed person
abused
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 a kid , that kid feels unsecured among the reputed people in society. And they try to take revenge on them in order to protect others.
This
 will lead to a lawbreaker. And in the modern
world
, social media and money are more important for the youth than studies. Every adolescent has their own cinema hero
live
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life
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 inside of them and, they desperately follow every step of their Hollywood characters. Just imagine if they chose a villain
?
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.
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 They will create more enemies among them. But, through proper guidance, we can reduce the impact. If a parent could spare some time to spend with kids and
if
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apply
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have a nice chat. That will help kids to be more protective.
Also
 if the government maximise the penalties for wrongful doings, kids will think twice before they attempt any criminal.
To conclude
, unless the efforts are made by the government
this
 situation will only escalate. The answer to reducing the crime level is to educate and guide the youth and increase the maximum penalty for lawbreakers.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • surge
  • productive activities
  • quality education
  • social media
  • peer pressure
  • economic disparity
  • disadvantaged backgrounds
  • legitimate means
  • inclusive education
  • mentorship
  • community policing
  • youth engagement
  • early intervention
  • constructive pathways
  • social services
  • at-risk families
  • root causes
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