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Developed countries should help poor nations. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people claim that the encouragement of poverty
countries
 should be assisting by wealthy nations.
However
, globalization must care about these nations starvation issues and it is essential for their exists.
Thus
, I strongly agree that assist them could make good international relations with them when it develops.
Firstly
, cuisine and medicine are significant determinants of humans surviving and helping others give many pros. Helping underdeveloped
countries
 can lead to good allies between nations and benefits both
countries
 in many aspects.
For example
, the country like the USA, and many more helping scarcity
countries
such
 as Africa to export their supply and water with condition that they have to grow some plants in the land of villages. African coffee is the obvious of a solution to solve the problem and both
gain
 advantages from it.
These product
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 can
auctions
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global
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 market and give
a lots
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 of income.
Secondly
, rescuing of illness peoples in poorness
countries
 receive knowledge and abilities. Rarity diseases mostly were found in these
countries
, so cures from developed
countries
 can improve
advance
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 of technologies in medical ways. Some regions
is
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 lacking
of
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hospitals so doctors have been sent to help them. These make them
gain
 experience in primary patients and critical cases. In my opinion, it's important for communities to help each other. Helping doesn't mean only give it
also
gain
 benefits together in economy and existence.
Lastly
, developed
countries
also
gain
 things in education way to progress the vaccine or medical innovation to prepare some ailment that might happen in own citizen in future.
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