These days Internet –based courses have become a popular alternative to University – based courses. Some students prefer this type of learning because they do not need to attend lectures. Others argue that it is important to study at university. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

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this
point of
time
, especially since pandemic, online courses is one of the solutions which given by
university
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to replace
face
to
face
learning. The question
then
rise, should the
students
attend
this
type of
lectures
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lecture

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permanently even after the pandemic
over
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or should they come back to
university
. In
this
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I will cover
both
pros and cons of each
sides
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and summarize them based on my thinking. Website-based learning offers more advantages for
both
of
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the
students
and the lecturers in
term
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of the
flexibilities
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flexibility

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of their learning process.
Firstly
, online lectures will help
both
parties to spend less
time
in the preparations. By having the activities in their own home, unlike with the offline learnings, it will reduce the
traveling
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time
to
university
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.
Thus
, the remaining
time
could be
use
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for other important things
such
as reading the materials and preparing the tasks.
Secondly
, internet-based courses allow the
students
and lecturers
joining
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the program from any
places
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they want
,
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so that they could continue their program while still spending more
time
with their
family
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. Research suggested that people with more family support will have
better
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grade
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in their education compared to the people with less support.
In
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the other hand, classroom-based learning is not all negative, it
also
brings positive impacts to the pupils.
This
type
of course
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will boost
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the moral

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moral
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of the
students
because they will get more attention they need from the lecturer in the
face
to
face
meeting compared with the online one.
In addition
, they will have more social interactions with their fellow classmates which can
also
boost their learning spirit. Another reason that could benefit the parties from
offline
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the offline
an offline

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course is that it is independent
to
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of

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the
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apply

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internet coverage and gadget utilization.
Students
with low access
on
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the internet or sophisticated gadget will still
able
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to follow the
proceses
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well.
Both
online and offline lectures have their own advantages and disadvantages. So, it is important that the
university
could give choices to the
students
and lecturers whether or not they would proceed
their
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educational program with internet-based courses based on their own assessment of their needs.
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