There have been many inventions in human history, such as the wheel. Some people think the most important thing is the internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Humans have been creating tremendous inventions from the past till
present
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and seem never going to stop. Some persons believe the greatest creation is the wheel while others say the
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essay strongly agrees that the
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is
one
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of the most essential groundbreaking innovations of humanity but not the only
one
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. On the
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hand, the evolution of
human
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humans
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started
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a long time ago since the
first
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caveman found out how to kindle fire, after
that other troglodytes
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who lived in the same area
with
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him knew how to do so. Human beings like to be together as
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a group
and sharing like the
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group
cave
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dweller that could handle fire.
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Whilst
the other primitive men who lived far away might found
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approach in the
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decade. What would
happended
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happened
happen
if people could
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connected
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with each other since that? How fast of human development would be? Working as a team and potioning
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
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are the base of human breakthrough and the
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has
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a big role in it. It helps people explore the world the
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screen and learn. It destroys the wall of study and other fields as well. We could say the advancement of mankind between
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this
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ten years is from the
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.
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, even the network is
one
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of the biggest
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of adaptation,
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, it definitely is not the most
nescessary
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necessary
thing.
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, if a man
lost
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in the woods where has no signal the
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would not help him to survive;
water
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a water
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bottle, electricity, and fire would save his life for sure.
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shows
human
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humans
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can live without the
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. In conclusion,
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the
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is might not the most quintessential design but it is undeniably the path to the
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foot step
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footstep
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of humanity.
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