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Stress is now a major problem in many countries around the world. What are some of the factors in modern society and how can we reduce it?

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In today's world of hurry and ,bustle it is impossible to have
stress
 free
life
 as everyone wants to have all the facilities and luxuries and keep running for making ends meet
this
 in fact gives birth to
stress
 building.There is a number of factors adding to the
stress
 and ways to eliminate them, in
this
 essay I am going to discuss them in detail. The constant change in the business world keeps changing in job demands and those who are in jobs have to keep updating themselves and any lack in skills endangers job security which gives rise to
stress
.Financial needs can come up anytime due to unforeseen factors
such
 as illness,accidents or death of family members,in ,addition high demand from the job puts pressure on personal
life
.Expectations from near and dear people and their own ambitions in
life
 are another reason for
stress
. Dealing with
such
 high-
stress
stress
life
 needs ways to release it like yoga,meditation,regular exercise.swimming and attending places to pray which takes you away from
stress
 , give the mind and body relaxation and fill with freshness.some people join laughter clubs,Zumba classes for the same reason
however
 the main way to cure is to remove the root cause of
stress
 by choosing simple and sober
life
. in ,
the
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summary I would like to suggest rather than dealing with
stress
 we should try to frame
life
 in a planned and natural way with simplicity and limit
life
 expectations of physical facilities,which makes
life
 joyful and meaningful in long run.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unemployment
  • financial instability
  • social safety nets
  • constant connectivity
  • work-life balance
  • remote work
  • social isolation
  • community support
  • chronic illnesses
  • affordable healthcare
  • public health campaigns
  • mental well-being
  • high-stakes testing
  • holistic education
  • flexible working hours
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