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Some people soy lhof economic developmenl is necessory lo reduce the poverty in ihe world. Ofhers soy lhol economic growlh should be sfopped immediolely lo slop domoging lhe environmenl. Discuss bofh sides ond give your opinion.

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The bar chart illustrates, the highest number of
electricity
 developers and users in the year 2014. Units are in billion
kWh
. Overall, among all the ten countries china rule the highest number by generating and using
electricity
 while all other states consumption is below the same level except America keeps
second
 in the list. For Except all other countries Germany seems to have energy shortage compare to their production and
usage
. In the year 2014 china conquer energy consumption (5,322
kWh
) and manufacture (5,398
kWh
) while America keeps
second
 with developing
electricity
 4,099kWh and using 3,866
kWh
. During the same ,period all other competitive states keep their
electricity
 production between 1,057
kWh
 to 485.1
kWh
 and
usage
 of energy between 1,038
kWh
 to 449.5
kWh
. All other 9 states keep their manufacturing higher than their
usage
 in the year 2014.
However
, Germany does it opposite as their
electricity
usage
 582.5
kWh
 while they only producing 526.6 to their consumers. It shows a 55.9
kWh
electricity
 shortage for them.
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