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All cars that burn fossil fuels should be banned and electric cars should replace them. Do you agree or disagree?

#cars #fuels
It is argued that
the
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vehicles with fossil fuels should
be entirely forbid
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 and encourage
using
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 electric
cars
. I agree with
this
 statement because it is the only option of environmental friendly option and encourages to
promote
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renewable
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source
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sources
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 of
energy
. people are using
the
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cars
 which burns more fuel
energy
 and has a
danger
 of
of
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air pollution with
gas
 emissions.
Firstly
, vehicles
produces
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 more toxic
gas
 emissions which are not environment friendly and in
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return
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returns
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 these gases can endanger the different species which are living on the earth.
For instance
, producing
of
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more carbon
gas
 when people are using
for
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it for
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 long distances is more
danger
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 as in return it is
non-renewable
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a non-renewable
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energy
 source.
Secondly
,encouraging
public
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the public
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 to use more eco-friendly can be helpful to the
human
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humans
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 and other living organisms from the
uv
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UV
 rays that
produces
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produce
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 in fossil fuel
cars
.
Moreover
,
introduction
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 of electric
cars
 be helpful because of less fuel and there will be
set
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 of applications
which
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 are monitored and
it
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is easy to access.
Lastly
,
Government
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the Government
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 introducing more electric
cars
 and encouraging
public
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the public
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 to buy electric
cars
 .
However
,
this
 can be a
life saver
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lifesaver
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.
For instance
,many countries are producing
cars
which
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 are
less
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fewer
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energy
 producers and providing
differnt
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different
 schemes which are affordable
of
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for
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 buying electric
cars
.
Moreover
, electric
cars
 are less space and need to connect with a
power saving
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power-saving
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 application which
are
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is
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 related to the solar
energy
 because of natural
gas
 producers it is less
danger
 and renewable source of
energy
.
Furthermore
, it is
best
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 alternative solution in which it runs with power consumption
energy
 and battery full recharged.
These kind
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This kind
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 of vehicles needs encouragement and adopted world
widely
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 as soon as possible to stop the
danger
 that affects
environment
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the environment
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. To conclude,I firmly believe
that encouraging electric
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that encouraging electric car
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cars
 are advisable to the public because of less pollution and environmental
danger
.
However
,it is related
with
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 the
power consuming
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 task which can be helpful from people's lives at risk.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fossil fuels
  • emissions
  • air pollution
  • greenhouse gases
  • climate change
  • sustainable
  • renewable
  • electric vehicles
  • battery technology
  • charging infrastructure
  • range anxiety
  • government support
  • incentives
  • subsidies
  • renewable energy
  • environmental impact
  • energy efficiency
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